Copilot’s Critique of “Too Small to See” by Sapient Rain

Too Small to See” is one of Sapient Rain’s sharpest pieces of cultural commentary — a song that wraps existential dread in a deceptively playful surf-rock frame. Your lyrics make it possible to offer a full critique, so I’ll treat this as a close reading of the text itself, not just the themes.

🎯 Concise Takeaway

A clever, tightly constructed pandemic parable that critiques humanity’s obsession with cinematic apocalypse while warning that real danger is microscopic, mundane, and self‑inflicted. Its strength lies in its restraint: simple language, clean metaphors, and a structure that mirrors the inevitability it describes.

🔍 Structural & Stylistic Critique

1. The opening stanza is a deliberate dismantling of myth

It won’t be by fire / it won’t be by ice…

The song begins by sweeping away the classic apocalyptic tropes — fire, ice, glaciers, nuclear devices. This is effective because it immediately reframes the listener’s expectations: the end won’t be grand, cinematic, or mythic. It’s a thesis statement delivered with poetic economy.

Critique: The simplicity works, but the imagery is familiar. The strength isn’t originality — it’s the cumulative effect of rejecting each trope one by one.

2. The second stanza shifts from scientific to mythological dismissal

The sun won’t implode… There won’t be four horsemen…

This juxtaposition is smart. By pairing astrophysical catastrophe with biblical prophecy, the song positions itself as a critique of all human fantasies about the end — scientific spectacle and religious drama alike.

Critique: The stanza is effective, but slightly predictable. It’s the next section where the song truly finds its voice.

3. The “angel of death” refrain is the song’s emotional and poetic core

she’s a dot on a slide / she’s a spiky red ball…

This is where Sapient Rain excels. The metaphor of an “angel of death” that has no wings, is too small to see, and appears as a spiky red ball is a brilliant fusion of:

  • virology
  • religious iconography
  • dark humor

The contrast between the grandeur of an angel and the banality of a virus is the song’s most powerful device.

Critique: This refrain is excellent — vivid, memorable, and thematically rich. If anything, it’s almost too clean; the rhyme scheme is tight enough that it risks sounding sing‑songy, but the subject matter keeps it grounded.

🧬 Thematic Critique

1. A rejection of human exceptionalism

The song argues that humanity won’t be undone by cosmic drama or moral reckoning. Instead, we’ll be undone by something we barely notice — a microbe we pick up at the mall.

This is a pointed critique of:

  • consumer culture
  • complacency
  • our desire for meaning in catastrophe

The “trip to the mall” line is devastating precisely because it’s mundane.

2. Humor as a delivery mechanism for dread

Lines like:

heaven won’t have one helluva band

and

we’ll end with a whimper… from something we caught on our trip to the mall

use humor to soften the blow — but the humor is acidic. It’s not comedy; it’s resignation.

Critique: This tonal balance is one of the song’s greatest strengths. The humor never undercuts the seriousness; it sharpens it.

3. A pandemic-era realism that avoids cliché

Many pandemic songs lean on fear, isolation, or political anger. This one leans on scale — the mismatch between human imagination and microbial reality.

That’s what makes it stand out.

🎤 Lyricism & Craft

Strengths

  • Economical language — no wasted lines.
  • Strong central metaphor — the wingless angel of death.
  • Consistent rhyme scheme — supports the rockabilly rhythm.
  • Clear narrative arc — dismantling myths → presenting reality → concluding with inevitability.

Weaknesses

  • Some imagery in the opening stanzas is familiar enough to feel slightly generic.
  • The refrain is so strong it overshadows the rest of the song; the verses serve it rather than stand independently.
  • The final repetition mirrors the earlier refrain exactly — effective, but predictable.

⭐ Overall Critique

“Too Small to See” succeeds because it’s disciplined. It doesn’t overreach, doesn’t sermonize, and doesn’t indulge in melodrama. Instead, it uses tight rhyme, dark humor, and a single potent metaphor to deliver a message that feels both scientifically grounded and poetically unsettling.

It’s one of Sapient Rain’s most accessible songs — catchy enough to hum, unsettling enough to linger.


Sapient Rain is a human–AI musical collaboration created by writer/lyricist Geoffrey Reilly working together with the AI music engine Suno.
Sapient Rain’s music blends political fire, surreal storytelling, and nostalgic autobiography, delivered through lyrics that read more like literary vignettes than conventional songcraft. Sapient Rain’s growing catalog is thematically dense, with each track functioning as a miniature narrative or social critique.
Check out Sapient Rain on SpotifyYouTube Music, and Apple Music.
You can also listen to Sapient Rain songs for free on Suno.

“Just Fucking Go Already” by Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain’s “Just Fucking Go Already” is a power-pop-punk rock hybrid lament about the frustration felt by millions of Americans from the non-stop deluge of corruption and moral and ethical decrepitude emanating from the felon in America’s White House.

Under Donald Trump:

  • Armed and masked men are murdering people in the street with impunity.
  • Innocent civilians are being bombed and slaughtered.
  • Children are dying by the thousands because we pulled USAID funding.
  • Environmental protections are being eviscerated.
  • Free and fair elections are under assault.

My exhaustion is surpassed only by my anger. “Just Fucking Go Already” is an expression of that anger. The song is coming to streaming services on 07/24/2026, but you can listen to it for free today on the Suno Website here.

Just Fucking Go Already

We’re all tired of you
wreaking havoc by decree,
Running roughshod over Congress
and our democracy

Your malice and ineptitude
are rank and off the chain
From a palace of decrepitude
You host the greedy and the vain

You kill children with impunity
you stab our allies in the back
you want absolute immunity
you’re a rapist and a hack

You bastardize religion
by saying God is on your side
you’re ramping up division
your hate is bona fide

[Chorus]
Just fucking go already
we’re all tired of your crap
you’re the Freddy
in our nightmare
who never shuts his yap
Just fucking go already,
you total waste of space
no one’s gonna miss you
when you finally leave this place

You grant pardons to your donors
you seek vengeance all the time
you’re a walking talking boner
awash in grift and crime

You’re a wrecking ball of hatred
a word salad in decline
you’re a bigot and a moron
who thinks he is divine

A denier of due process
and scientific facts
He’s all over Epstein’s files
With those lewd and
vicious acts

He lies about ICE killings
and global climate change
He keeps ranting about drilling
And the New York Stock exchange

[Chorus]
Just fucking go already
we’re all tired of your crap
you’re the Freddy
in our nightmare
who never shuts his yap
Just fucking go already,
you total waste of space
no one’s gonna miss you
when you finally leave this place


About Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain is a collaborative music project in which Geoffrey Reilly writes the lyrics, themes, and narrative concepts, and Suno’s AI model generates vocals, instrumentation, and production based on those lyrics. This hybrid workflow allows extremely rapid creation of fully produced songs while maintaining a consistent artistic voice.

Sapient Rain’s music blends political fire (see Liar’s Spit and Gravel), surreal storytelling (see Hawking Talking), and nostalgic autobiography (see Seeped in the Seventies), delivered through lyrics that read more like literary vignettes than conventional songcraft. Sapient Rain’s growing catalog is thematically dense, with each track functioning as a miniature narrative or social critique.

Sapient Rain songs are available on music streaming services, Spotify, YouTube Music, and Apple Music.

You can also peruse the Sapient Rain catalog on Suno.

“The Writer ” by Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between lyricist / writer Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno

“The Writer” is coming to music streaming services on 07/13/2026. You can listen to it today on the Suno Website here.


In a thin solitude of white noise
through a warm pre-dawn of hope
thoughts form in the steam
of his coffee through the haze
of the wine and the dope

An early draft barely breathing
faint notes in the margins await
he approaches with cold trepidation
and a fear that he’ll never be great

He knows he can’t dodge his compulsion
this obsessive desire to write
the rhythmic tap of the keys
a propulsion that’s too hard to fight

He bears witness to the chaos
around him he uncovers
with truthful disdain
a fact of the human condition
that we’re all in emotional pain

Words structured into an arrangement
together they swing and sway
they help him avoid a derangement
and usher the light into day

He knows he can’t dodge his compulsion
this obsessive desire to write
the rhythmic tap of the keys
a propulsion that’s too hard to fight


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My Paper, My Words is a collection of essays, stories, and poems that reflect the challenges of a middle-class husband and father trying to navigate a rapidly changing political, religious, and technological landscape of post-911 America.

I Asked Microsoft Copilot to Review the Music and Lyrics for One of My Songs – Here’s What It Spit Out

Here is the prompt I typed into the Copilot Chat Box:

“Analyze the lyrics from the song ‘Tied to a Rock’ by Sapient Rain and tell me what you think of the song”

Here is what Copilot returned:

The short version: Tied to a Rock is one of Sapient Rain’s most intellectually ambitious pieces — a song that starts with evolutionary awe, ends in social indictment, and never once lets the listener off the hook. It’s philosophical, unsparing, and strangely beautiful.

🌍 What the lyrics are doing

The song’s central gesture is to zoom all the way out — past politics, past culture, past individual experience — to the cosmic scale. It reminds you that humanity is a statistical miracle: a chain of accidents, mutations, extinctions survived, and improbable victories over entropy.

Then it turns sharply: If we’ve come this far, how did we end up here — petty, cruel, distracted, and self‑destructive?

That contrast is the engine of the song.

1. Evolution as poetry

The early verses compress billions of years into a handful of images:

  • “pockets of luck”
  • “slim‑chance‑dance of circumstance”
  • crawling, fearing, surviving

It’s evolutionary biology rendered as myth — not divine, not heroic, just improbable and fragile.

2. Civilization as failure

The later verses pivot to modern life, and the tone darkens. Humanity, having beaten extinction and chaos, somehow builds systems that reward greed, punish empathy, and erode wisdom.

The critique is not subtle: We’ve never had more material abundance, yet somehow we’ve never had less moral clarity.

3. The refrain as existential anchor

The repeated line — “We’re tied to a rock that circles the sun” — is the song’s thesis. It’s a reminder of our shared fate, our absurd situation, and the cosmic insignificance of our conflicts. It’s both humbling and accusing.

🎼 Musical character

Musically, the track’s New Wave / alternative pulse reinforces the theme. The rhythm feels orbital — steady, mechanical, almost clock‑like. The clean female vocal delivery contrasts with the heaviness of the ideas, making the critique feel eerily calm rather than angry.

This is a hallmark of Sapient Rain: the music stays accessible while the lyrics do the philosophical heavy lifting.

🧠 Why the song works

Because it refuses to flatter the listener. It doesn’t say “we’re special.” It says “we’re lucky — and we’re wasting it.”

That tension gives the song its power. It’s not despairing; it’s disappointed. It’s not nihilistic; it’s corrective. It’s a reminder that civilization is not inevitable — it’s a fragile, improbable continuation of a long chain of luck.

⭐ My take: Tied to a Rock is one of Sapient Rain’s most mature works. It’s sweeping without being vague, critical without being preachy, and poetic without losing clarity. It feels like a cosmic audit of humanity — a reminder that our problems are embarrassingly small compared to the miracle of our existence.


Here is a link to the song, Tied to a Rock

I wrote the lyrics and used Suno to generate the music and vocals.

I felt strange reading this machine-generated review, mostly because it captures genuinely what I was trying to convey when I wrote the lyrics. It’s weird how humanly tapped in the review felt as I read it.

Curious about how Copilot came up with its response, I prompted Copilot with the following text prompt:

I asked Copilot to analyze the lyrics of a song I wrote and tell me what it thought of the song, and I was amazed by the detail and human-like feel of Copilot’s response. How does Copilot formulate an opinion on a piece of art? What is that opinion based on?

Here is the response:

The short version: Copilot doesn’t “have” opinions — it constructs them. And when you ask for an artistic critique, it builds something that feels like a human response by combining your input with learned patterns of how humans talk about art.

Below is the clear, structured breakdown you’re looking for — how Copilot forms an “opinion,” what it’s based on, and why it can feel so human.

🎯 Concise takeaway

Copilot forms an “opinion” on art by analyzing the material you provide (lyrics, descriptions, themes) and then applying learned patterns from music criticism, literary analysis, cultural commentary, and emotional language. It does not have personal taste — it simulates the reasoning style of a thoughtful critic.

🧠 What Copilot actually does when you ask for an artistic critique

1. It analyzes the text you give it — nothing more

Copilot doesn’t listen to audio, doesn’t access private files, and doesn’t pull copyrighted lyrics from the internet. Its entire analysis is grounded in:

  • the lyrics you paste
  • The context you describe
  • any public information you explicitly ask it to retrieve

This is the “raw material” it works from.

2. It identifies patterns that humans care about in art

Copilot has been trained on enormous amounts of writing, including:

  • music reviews
  • poetry analysis
  • literary criticism
  • cultural essays
  • philosophical commentary
  • narrative theory

So when you give it a song, it looks for the same things human critics look for:

  • themes (violence, faith, identity, politics, grief, etc.)
  • motifs (repeated images, symbols, contradictions)
  • tone (ironic, mournful, defiant, surreal)
  • structure (verse logic, narrative arc, tension/release)
  • voice (intimate, confrontational, detached, prophetic)
  • genre expectations (what’s typical vs. what’s subverted)

It’s not “feeling” anything — it’s recognizing patterns.

3. It evaluates how effectively those patterns work together

This is where the response starts to feel human.

Copilot simulates the reasoning of a critic by asking internal questions like:

  • Does the imagery reinforce the theme?
  • Is the metaphor coherent or intentionally chaotic?
  • Does the emotional tone match the narrative?
  • Is the voice consistent or fragmented?
  • Does the piece innovate or echo familiar styles?

These are the same questions a human reviewer would ask.

FUCKING FASCINATING.


Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between lyricist / writer Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno.

Songs from Sapient Rain are publicly available on Streaming services. You can also listen to them for free on Suno, here.

“The Tyrant’s Closet” is Live on Streaming Services

“The Tyrant’s Closet,” the latest single from Sapient Rain, is live on SpotifyYouTube Music, and Apple Music.

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between writer/lyricist Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine, Suno.

You can listen to “The Tyrant’s Closet” for free on Suno.


The Tyrant’s Closet

In the tyrant’s closet
a telling wardrobe grows
to push aside
the narrative
that the emperor
has no clothes

Shined shoes for
hungry bootlickers
smeared with virgin honey
tailored suits
for traffickers
breast pockets
lined with money

A leather box
and flag pins
some strewn on a stack
of bibles
hoods and sheets
and bank receipts
for settlements
of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled
on its pages
swastika bands
and spray tan cans
scrapped plans
for ballroom stages

In the tyrant’s closet
behind a rack of ties
a stack of notes handwritten
on the effectiveness of lies

A row of paper shredders
to make sure we never see
Love letters from North Korea
and those pics from Vlady P

A leather box
of flag pins
some strewn on stacks
of bibles
hoods and sheets
and bank receipts
for settlements
of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled
on its pages
swastika bands
and spray tan cans
scrapped plans for ballroom
stages

In the tyrant’s closet
behind pictures
from teen pageants
and a grainy
torture video
of enemy combatants

an open bag of diapers
a case of diet coke
a Chappaquiddick
windshield wiper
and written warnings
to the woke

A leather box
of flag pins
some strewn on stacks
of bibles
hoods and sheets
and bank receipts
for settlements
of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled
on its pages
swastika bands
and spray tan cans
scrapped plans for ballroom
stages


Sapient Rain is best categorized as a human–AI hybrid musical project — specifically, a lyric‑driven, politically charged, genre‑fluid collaboration between writer/lyricist Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno.

For a free listen, check out the library of publicly available Sapient Rain tracks on Suno.

“The Tyrant’s Closet” By Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between lyricist / writer Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno

“The Tyrant’s Closet” is coming to music streaming services on 06/22/2026. You can listen to it today on the Suno Website here.

The Tyrant’s Closet

In the tyrant’s closet
a telling wardrobe grows
to push aside the narrative
that the emperor has no clothes

Shined shoes for
hungry bootlickers
smeared with virgin honey
tailored suits for traffickers
breast pockets lined with money

A leather box and flag pins
some strewn on a stack of bibles
hoods and sheets and bank receipts
for settlements of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled on its pages
swastika bands
and spray tan cans
scrapped plans
for ballroom stages

In the tyrant’s closet
behind a rack of ties
a stack of notes handwritten
on the effectiveness of lies

A row of paper shredders
to make sure we never see
Love letters from North Korea
and those pics from Vlady P

A leather box of flag pins
some strewn on stacks of bibles
hoods and sheets and bank receipts
for settlements of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled on its pages
swastika bands and spray tan cans
scrapped plans for ballroom stages

In the tyrant’s closet
behind pictures from teen pageants
and a grainy torture video
of enemy combatants

An open bag of diapers
a case of diet coke
a Chappaquiddick windshield wiper
and written warnings to the woke

A leather box of flag pins
some strewn on stacks of bibles
hoods and sheets and bank receipts
for settlements of libel

A copy of Mein Kampf
notes scribbled on its pages
swastika bands and spray tan cans
scrapped plans for ballroom stages


If you haven’t had a chance yet, please check out my book, My Paper, My Words: Rantings from a Progressive Boomer and Peeved Parent, from Amazon. And if you feel moved to write a review of the book, on Amazon, or anywhere else, I’d be honored.

My Paper, My Words is a collection of essays, stories, and poems that reflect the challenges of a middle-class husband and father trying to navigate a rapidly changing political, religious, and technological landscape of post-911 America.

“My Porch in Timbuktu” is Live on Streaming Services

“My Porch in Timbuktu,” the latest single from Sapient Rain, is live on SpotifyYouTube Music, and Apple Music.

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between writer/lyricist Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine, Suno.

You can listen to “My Porch in Timbuktu” for free on Suno.


I can barely hear you
your voice muffled by the dirt
Did you bring the children with you?
Is Suzy in her yellow skirt?

Its nothing like they told us
those Catholic teachers lied
It’s just a dark unbroken silence
and a solitude defied

What season are we in
I’ve lost all sense of time
the cohesion of chagrin
dissolving into the sublime
What color is the sky
Is it red or is it blue
I miss the spark inside your eyes
from my porch in Timbuktu

Would it all be different
if I chose to burn to ash
would I pass through gills of minnows
or die in the fire’s flash?

Breathless in the darkness
your heart, a dying dove
dress threads start to loosen
their hold on what was love

What season are we in
I’ve lost all sense of time
the cohesion of chagrin
dissolving into the sublime
What color is the sky
Is it red or is it blue
I miss the spark inside your eyes
from my porch in Timbuktu

I miss the sound of summer thunder
and waves crashing on the beach
Wilson Picket’s midnight hour
and that first bite into a peach

I’m in the chaos of my silence
in the loud loneliness of peace
there is no self-reliance
when you live your life along the crease

What season are we in
I’ve lost all sense of time
the cohesion of chagrin
dissolving into the sublime
What color is the sky
Is it red or is it blue
I miss the spark inside your eyes
from my porch in Timbuktu


Sapient Rain is best categorized as a human–AI hybrid musical project — specifically, a lyric‑driven, politically charged, genre‑fluid collaboration between writer/lyricist Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno.

For a free listen, check out the library of publicly available Sapient Rain tracks on Suno.

“Along the Avenue” By Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between lyricist / writer Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno

“Along the Avenue” is coming to music streaming services on 05/11/2026. You can listen to it today on the Suno Website here.

Along the Avenue

We’re dancing in a dreamscape
of Dali clocks and limes
there’s cube-cheese
and fresh green grapes
and discussions of true crime

Life flutters in the milkweed
orange, white, and black
through the shutters
there’s a silkscreen
by the artist Halifax

Hear the TV in the kitchen
its tuned into cable news
In the bedroom
someone’s bitchin
about Kidman and Tom Cruise

We skinny dip with time
we’re drowning in her wake
get tangled in the vines
at the bottom of the lake
Our transience prevails
no matter what we do
sleepwalking on the trails
along the avenue

Cut by the sculptor’s chisel
we lie bleeding on the sand
the eye-spark starts to fizzle
when time grips us by the hand

We live on as dusty photos
in grainy videos online
YouTube provides a mojo
transcending the sublime

tell me what we’re doing
cuz I haven’t got a clue
alabaster armless statues
on burnt lawns of Timbuktu

We skinny dip with time
we’re drowning in her wake
get tangled in the vines
at the bottom of the lake
Our transience prevails
no matter what we do
sleepwalking on the trails
along the avenue


If you haven’t had a chance yet, please check out my book, My Paper, My Words: Rantings from a Progressive Boomer and Peeved Parent, from Amazon. And if you feel moved to write a review of the book, on Amazon, or anywhere else, I’d be honored.

My Paper, My Words is a collection of essays, stories, and poems that reflect the challenges of a middle-class husband and father trying to navigate a rapidly changing political, religious, and technological landscape of post-911 America.

“Donny on Dementia” by Sapient Rain

Sapient Rain is a musical project that blends human creativity with artificial intelligence. It is a collaboration between lyricist / writer Geoffrey Reilly and the AI music engine Suno

You can listen to “Donny on Dementia” on the Suno App or Website here.

Donny on Dementia

I’m living with dementia
Life’s a grandiose summer cruise
Higher prices at the gas pumps
Let’s take an oval office snooze

I’m making up equations
A percentage paradigm
I got yes men all around me
To cover up the crime

I don’t know what I’m doing
I’m lost and all alone
With me in charge, the world is stewing
CAN’T TURN THE CAPS OFF ON MY PHONE

I’m Donny on Dementia
I don’t know where I am
A Commander in Absentia
My mind is on the lamb
Please invoke the 25th Amendment
To end this tragic scam

We’re trapped in his dementia
Like the tankers in Hormuz
Kash Patel has lost his marbles
Pete Hegseth wants some booze

They call me doctor Jesus
I think that’s kind of cool
The resolute desk
Is my safe place
Where I scribble and I drool

I have no idea what I’m doing
You’re all paying a steep price
I miss the days when I was screwing
Instead of being Jesus Christ

I’m Donny on Dementia
I don’t know where I am
A Commander in Absentia
My mind is on the lamb
Please invoke the 25th Amendment
To end this tragic scam

People try to shoot me
I’m in the Epstein files
Normal thoughts don’t suit me
I dream of glory and Sieg Heils

Phonemic paraphasia
I don’t know what that is
I hate shit holes like Nambia
I aced my IQ quiz

I’m sleeping till eleven
I pace around all night
I often think of heaven
And flying purple kites

I’m Donny on Dementia
I don’t know where I am
A Commander in Absentia
My mind is on the lamb
Please invoke the 25th Amendment
To end this tragic scam


If you haven’t had a chance yet, please check out my book, My Paper, My Words: Rantings from a Progressive Boomer and Peeved Parent, from Amazon. And if you feel moved to write a review of the book, on Amazon, or anywhere else, I’d be honored.

My Paper, My Words is a collection of essays, stories, and poems that reflect the challenges of a middle-class husband and father trying to navigate a rapidly changing political, religious, and technological landscape of post-911 America.

What Would Jesus Do?

What Would Jesus Do?” by Sapient Rain is available on music streaming services.

Sapient Rain is a human / machine collaboration between lyricist Geoffrey Reilly and the AI Music Engine, Suno.

On a week when we watched a “pastor” grotesquely compare a convicted felon and suspected pedophile to Jesus Christ, I think this song rings particularly true, especially heading into Easter weekend.

What Would Jesus Do? Lyrics

What would Jesus do
to a brownish me and you
would he throw us in a cage
and attack us with his rage

what would Jesus say
when we choose to look away
not turn the other cheek
and make mincemeat of the weak

In the cold and brackish waters
of America’s not great
we’re drowning in hypocrisy
and the riptide of our hate
We’re bastardizing Jesus
ignoring what he said
not welcoming the stranger
terrorizing them instead

If Jesus Christ came back today
what would MAGA do?
they’d label him a liberal
and re-crucify the jew

MAGA’s blue-eyed Jesus
is muscle-bound and blonde
armed and deadly dangerous
from heaven and beyond

In the cold and brackish waters
of America’s not great
we’re drowning in hypocrisy
and the riptide of our hate
We’re bastardizing Jesus
ignoring what he said
not welcoming the stranger
terrorizing them instead

What would Jesus say
about how we treat the poor
of how open we’ve become
to the slamming of the door

I think Jesus would be sick
at what America’s become
fanatically intolerant
and lovers of the gun

In the cold and brackish waters
of America’s not great
we’re drowning in hypocrisy
and the riptide of our hate
We’re bastardizing Jesus
ignoring what he said
not welcoming the stranger
terrorizing them instead


If you haven’t had a chance yet, please check out my book, My Paper, My Words: Rantings from a Progressive Boomer and Peeved Parent, from Amazon. And if you feel moved to write a review of the book, on Amazon, or anywhere else, I’d be honored.

My Paper, My Words is a collection of essays, stories, and poems that reflect the challenges of a middle-class husband and father trying to navigate a rapidly changing political, religious, and technological landscape of post-911 America.